Workings

Ok here's a story snipet from my comic. I know I'm a horrible person and I write in Novel format instead of script, but script format pisses me off. This is how I plan on starting out I believe.


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This story begins, like most good things do, in a bar. Well almost. I suppose I should start at the first time I met the man before me.


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“We the jury find the accused Grey Mason Holmes guilty of 45 counts of murder in the 3rd degree.


“Murder?” Grey questioned, “I never laid a hand on those people.” He continued, “well.. Except for the last two, but-“
“Order!” The judge demanded banging his gavel, “For these crimes-.”
As the judge continued I could help but examine Mr. Holmes. He was a very well dressed and even handsome man. He was a detective for Scotland Yard. How could it have gone unnoticed for so long that one of their own was a murderer? Though his own story was sad enough in it’s self. Apparently he snapped and went off the deep end when a crime syntactic broke into his home and killed his wife and child in an attempt to get him to back off. Though in the same case wouldn’t you do the same? The bailf cuffed and carted the man off even at his several objections to the ruling, after all he had never touched a single hair on their heads. They killed themselves. The Judge did show some compassion though, instead of the death penalty he instead got to sever out 45 life sentence. Better than dyeing though.. Right?
Turns out Grey’s stay in prison was even more problematic than his own freedom. Every time he was given a new cellmate they all ended up committing suicide and he would just smile and laugh at the guards saying he had no idea what happened. He tried to stop them but it always seemed to late. Grey never found their company agreeable to begin with. They tried locking him in solitary and almost anything else they could, but it never seemed to work.


Until one day when roll call came around and Grey was no where to be found. He had escaped from maximum security prison in a single night. They found no tunnels, nothing on the cameras, nothing. It was like he was a ghost. Panic spread as it hit the news and a nationwide manhunt took place and still they came up empty handed. As hard as they looked Mr. Holmes was nowhere to be found and yet here he sits plain as day on the bar stool before me. I should be scared, but I’m not. I feel oddly calm, and even safe. But an even more pressing question is, why does he sit here? This self proclaimed angel of death and judger of men seemed to find me. Maybe my time has just run out? Even as he folded his hands on the table a leaned forward smiling at me I still felt no fear. Maybe this was how he did it all these years.
“Don’t be so nervous.” Grey chuckled.


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MmMm yes. lol. This can be drawn out several ways I guess that why I like writing everything up like this. It'll probably go something like this bar push in, them sitting at the table, flashbacks of Grey's "crimes", trail, jail times, escape, and then back to the present at the bar.

Now on this note I plan on making Grey older than I originally intended. I have him down as being 32 years old. Well quite frankly that is too young for how I have his life written, also I think he also needs the add years of experiance to do what he does so very well. So now I'm thinking he is going to be in his later 40s. 47 or so. Sounds like a good plan.

Then here we encounter this fun little problem that I ALWAYS have! I have no idea who is telling the story or who is sitting across from Grey in this scene. -_- I know I'm made of fail sometimes. This all traces back to the fact that I SUCK at making heroes because quiet frankly I don't want some crazy ideal in my comic like freakin Superman or something. I have problems making good guys well because I tend to believe the worset in people. That's why I have so many villians >_> lol. There has to be some kind of formula for making a character that is good, BELIEVABLE, and that I totally don't want to kill off becasue I hate them so. This hasn't worked out well in the past... Obviously. So this leaves me with the obvious path of anti-hero. But you see, in its own messed up way that is Grey. I know hate me.

The world I have set up is chaulk full of insane, deranged, and evil people. There needs to be a little more balance for my tastes other than what I call "god characters" that are things like the police, ect. Maybe this person telling the story needs to be a neutral. I'm comfortable making neutrals, but I think they should still lean on way of the other. Good cop, Bad cop doesn't work with out the good cop!!!! Someone help me this a good person who I don't want to murder ;A;

My Brain doesn't function on that level o.o

lol I'll be posting new silhouettes soon. Oh yeah all my people are getting redesigns!!!

EDIT!!!

Ok so I lied... Just a little, I forgot about 2 characters I have designed just no one has ever seen them yet. SO Grey is Either talking to Sawyer and girl who is dying from cancer, or Guillermo a guy, who well has nooooo story yet. so yeah >_> still need some help there lol